Peer-reviewing was one of my best thing in ENG 110. When I peer-reviewed other’s work, I targeted on their thesis mainly. I locatethat the thesis is the largest phase of a paper because the whole conversation is primarily based round it. On my second peer reviewing I highlighted places that I concept ought to use improvement; both making the sentence more clear or explaining something that would be difficult to anyone without a background in the articles or even simply the subject at hand. I also try to leave good comments to other people’s work. When i do peer reviewing always comment where they need to improve or make better statement or add quote to support their claim. I comment on them to both go away an advice of a one of a kind quote or a way to combine it so it’s no longer so unexpectedly dropped into the paragraph. At the end of each peer review, our professor had us write an endnote to tie all the feedback together into a gist, giving the writer a feel of what to expect and how we idea the piece is going so far. I assume this is an excellent aspect because it offers us a concept of what we genuinely want to center of attention on in the rest of the revision and modifying process. When other people peer reviewing my paper they find some mistake or something i have to change to make my paper strong and every time I do the changes after peer reviewing my paper get stronger and stronger.
End Note:
In the essay there are not a lot of changes that need to be done. The only problems that I see with the essay are many small grammatical issues. You did a good job transitioning the paragraphs for each topic. I would just try to say what you will be talking about in the introduction paragraph more clearly. In the essay the use of quotes to support what you are saying is good. Another thing that I would fix with the paper would be cleaning up your beginning paragraph. I think that there is a lot of information in it which is good but it makes it harder to understand where you stand yourself on the topic. This can be done by just trimming some of the information down and developing a more clear thesis statement. Other than that for a first draft this is a really good paper. If you fix up some of the issues than easily this paper will become much better.
