In this paper I am trying to improve on my introduction paragraph. This is by putting in the right amount of information without overloading while still making a clear statement about where I stand on the topic. In my revisions I hope to fix all of my grammatical issues, I also plan to add in quotes to support my arguments. Also in the paper I plan to add in stories that can also relate to the topic and the subjects. The biggest challenge that I may face is being able to find enough quotes from different sources to support claims. Another challenge that I can see is addressing counterclaims. This is a challenge because I think it is a struggle to look at things from the other point of view. If the challenges are too hard for me to finish on my own I will probably look at other students work for inspiration. If that does not work than I will probably ask one of my peers to help me get a new set of eyes on the paper. If I complete these changes then I believe that the paper will start to look more like a paper that is a final product.
